King Leoric's Tale

King Leoric's Tale

Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 12:07 am

Chapter One King Leoric

In the distant Plaguelands , there was a wretched human who calls himself King Leoric. His minions were undead and he slays his own kind. The humans.He also enslaves them and turns them against their own kind. One day , his greatest order was said.
"Tomorrow before sunrise , we will gather and strike Dalaran with all our force. I will come along to aid you all in battle"
The ghouls and humans alike confused making one enslaved human go up to King Leoric saying King Leoric , why Dalaran?
King Leoric grabbed his sword and cut the poor human's head off and said, Question me not or you shall all face my wrath.
The mighty king once sat down on his throne again thinking about what the human asked and though about it for a while.

He then gathered them all and announced before they striked,
Are you all ready? Dalaran is a mighty foe filled with warriors and spellcasters alike , be weary.

He then waved his sword towards Dalaran's direction , starting the march. The march of the King's soon death.

Chapter Two The Warning

The march was on . . . a day's travel left before they reach Dalaran. But there was one problem. . .
One of King Leoric's troops seem to have gone missing , his most elite of them all , Ezalor. Fearing that he might send word to Dalaran as a Warning as he came from there , he tells his minions to move faster towards Dalaran. . . luckily enough , Ezalor was on a horse to cut travel time by alot.

After a few hours , Ezalor finally got to Dalaran.
A guard goes to him and says , Halt! Who goes there?
Ezalor was surprised and said, It is I , Ezalor! The great Wizard who was enslaved by King Leoric , I have come in peace and I bear important news!
The guard was then surprised and said, Ezalor?! If you are Ezalor , step beside me.
Ezalor , not knowing of the new magic barrier in Dalaran , quickly steps beside the Guard. If the person who steps past the barrier is not a residence of Dalaran , that person would have been burned. So it seems that Ezalor wasn't burnt at all , meaning he is the true Ezalor. Knowing this , the guard says, Come with me Master Ezalor!

They have reached a high palace and as soon as they entered it , they saw the king of Dalaran. The king's royal guardsmen appeared in front of them and says, Who are you and what do you want? Ezalor , who quickly spoke said, I am Ezalor and I bear news that will be the destiny of Dalaran. . . either destroyed or saved. The king who overheard what Ezalor said quickly told his guards to let them go in. The guards had let Ezalor go and has moved towards the King.
The king then said, Ezalor , I am King Ash'katar. . . I thought you were dead the moment you were gone. . .
Ezalor replied, I was enslaved by King Leoric of Plaguelands . . . and he plans to assault Dalaran.
The king was shocked and said, Assault Dalaran?! . . . if so , then we must prepare!
Ezalor whom quickly replied said, Yes my king. I will be your guard. I will make sure that HE will not get past me . . . you will be safe milord . The king replied, Yes , thank you Ezalor. Now , royal guards , tell everybody to ready the Magical Barriers , and make sure that all battle stationed units are all ready to face the undead and humans alike!
The royal guards said, Affirmative King Ash'katar! We will leave right now The Royal Guards magically disappeard. . . Ezalor's mission to ready Dalaran for war is complete. . . but how will he be able to protect against someone who knows all his abilities?




All right , I'm stopping first. I've been awake for 16 Hours straight without sleep , and for a kid , thats bad. I'll start adding chapters as soon as I'm in the mood , or when I wake up. (Probably 10Hours from now.)

For now , discuss.
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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 12:29 am

pretty good

i always enjoy fan fiction but it seems to have been slowly dying out...

anyways, it's a nice read
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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 12:35 am

thanks . . . i woke up when i felt someone posted here. . . and while walking to the computer , i though it was dohyun . . . and guess what? i predicted right. . .

back to bed for me. /discuss.
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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 1:42 am

lol

have a restful sleep
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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 2:26 am

It's nicely done with proper english and grammar but I think it's quite short ^^

I hope to read more from you

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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 12:02 pm

@jemual: Its not yet finished. I had to sleep so I stopped first. XD
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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 12:11 pm

Having good luck and inspiration to continue your story Drifter. I really like to read on.
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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 12:17 pm

cool story i like it hope u'll continue

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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 12:22 pm

woah! is this the real story
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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 12:49 pm



Lol not to sound too pompus, but he wasn't using proper grammar.

"In the distant Plaguelands (there shouldn't be a space here) , there was a wretched human who calls himself King Leoric. His minions were undead and he slays( you have switched from past tense to present tense and it makes this bit sound awkward) his own kind. The humans ("The humans." is not a sentence). He also enslaves them and turns them against their own kind. One day (there shouldn't be a space here) , his greatest order was said."( this is not grammatically incorrect, it just doesn't go with the epic theme of the story, "One day" just sounds kind of plain )

..and this was just the first paragraph. I wont go into the rest because I realise that he is only like 11 and he was tired (16 hours lol, try 20 including 2 work shifts).

Moving away from all that, I like the story but I don't think you have to put in all the details about "and the he walked here" "and then he said exactly this" and a king shouldn't need to introduce himself

ENOUGH OF MY CRITICISM, I AM SICK OF MY OWN VOICE.

Aaaaaaaaaand other than all that keep up the good work.

P.S. If you want, I can edit it for you once you've finished to make it have proper English and grammar
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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 1:26 pm

Niceeeee;)!!!

Can't wait for ur next part:D!!

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Posted: Thu Jun 05, 2008 1:28 pm

@SAKMAN: Sure!

@others: Thanks. XD
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Posted: Sun Jun 22, 2008 8:15 am

@Drifter Z

Nice story!!! continue it when have idea!!
Btw i read your strategy on Vengeful Spirit.. it help me a lot.. Thanks!!

Keep up the good work:>

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Posted: Wed Jul 30, 2008 8:52 am

continue someday? please?

lol, whenever you have time i suggest you complete this story. or at least give an ending, whether it is crummy or not.


For example:

King Leoric and all his troops reached Dalaran. Upon seeing Ezalor on the side of the humans, Leoric was furious, and in his state of anger, he ordered all his troops to charge through. In a matter of seconds, the entire army of King Leoric had either survived (for they were residents of Dalaran) or perished (for they were NOT residents of Dalaran). King Leoric saw his horrible mistake and ran for the hills, only to be shot in the back by a well timed Illuminate.

THE END



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